Skeletons In The Closet- Page 4

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Adam's Comments:
Lemme see.... not a whole lot to say about this page, oddly enough. I do like this whole experience over the day mostly being told in flashbacks, it worked out very nicely. Also I enjoyed seeing that area over the gym where the group eats lunch again.

I dunno, maybe I'm not in a commenting mood at the moment. Did I make that shot of Christina luring Alex in too obvious? Admittedly, he did know something was up there, just not what.

Martin's Comments:
We really don't see Alex tying Dorothy's hair back nearly enough. It's sort of supposed to be her default look, but whenever it does come up it tends to be brief and be kind of ditched when the real drama starts. Guess since other than the chapter that didn't have Alex in it and the two flashback ones, everything so far has been pretty Starchild-heavy.

Did see a fair bit of it in Days Go By, come to think of it...

Anyway, yeah. Early in, but I'm going to go ahead and say that there is no Starchild in this chapter directly - a few flashback shots of her, but Alex never dawns the costume or anything. Chapter nine has the costume pretty early in, but this one, no sight of it. Will go ahead and say chapter ten won't have it either - kind of going to start showing a lot more life as Dorothy from here on out, though certainly not to the point of Starchild appearances being few and far between or anything.

Actually one of the aims of this side of this chapter's plot. Not to give too much away until we get further into it, but I kind of want this chapter and the accompanying BP one to tie up most - though certainly not all - of Alex's remaining hostility and bitterness over what's happened to him, and transition a bit more into him having to properly cope with it.

We should really see more of Alex's circle of friends, come to think of it. We get some emphasis on a few of them in this chapter, but some are mostly just for appearance's sake; again, be doing a lot more of that in chapter ten.